seeing trough the truth

You said you like me for a long time
What a fool was I to believe your lies
You smiled and kissed me and said everything was alright
Then the next day I feel an emptiness inside
Don’t get me wrong your not the first guy
To dish out these kind of lies
I’m falling for this all the time
My question now is trying to work out why?
Maybe my heads too far up in the sky
Heart open to a new direction
Upon reflection
I should have done this all the time
Not believing the same old lies
Which leaving me feeling empty I might cry
Question is knowing it’s the wrong guy
To fall again for the same old lyes
You said you liked me for a long time
What a fool was I to believe your lyes
Always falling for the wrong guy
Gonna walk away with my head up this time

I just read all three poems you posted.
And overall I could see the direction you were going. It's easy to see two of these are aimed at the same person.
Don't take this as criticism.
But the only thing missing from your poems are patience.
Patience in the spelling and grammar. Patience with the flow.

But the raw idea is good. Well done.


Not that anything I say matters. Cause I'm. Assuming. Your poems. Are for you.

LOL. Well thank you AshCooper. I found these on my laptop which I had written a couple of years ago and currently releasing some energy from that time so was laughing when I found them as completely forgot. My intention was to not mess with the rawness of it ie including the spelling or the flow as your right was more of a release energeticley for me. :) but what what the hec may as well share them as well put them out in the universe with love a release from my heart :)