Quietus
8-6-8-6 syllable count in rhyme abab +
6-6-6 syllable count tercet ccc + equal syllable couplet using refrain from first line, as last line of the poem Refrain is also the poem title I call this format Quietus. Look forward to contributions! |
First things first
first things first, we quieten heart melding our mind therein all souls be one, none stand apart as bliss throbs on our skin all we do, is be still shaped upon the anvil surrendered to Gods will quenching thirst first things first |
Galloping thought
Galloping thought, self-made prison Fears and desires seduce Inducing against soul treason Free is joyous recluse Wary of ego glue Each moment we renew Early morn pristine dew Bliss mist not caught Galloping thought |
My brain hurts to do this prose game
It’s like twisting a cork Inside my brain in time with trains Where nothing remain s Weary is the strain Tormenting my domain I’ll get over it with pain! (What’s next??) |
@ JustBe … there’s a refrain too as end line, besides first quatrain following an abab end rhyme.
Let’s say, your poem title is ‘my brain hurts’ 3 syllables, as refrain from first line, the concluding lines could be - thought forms spurt my brain hurts |
Laugh or cry
Laugh or cry, the sun will yet rise Oh, why does heart contract Does not each breath usher surprise Soul eternal, a fact Let’s then cut to the chase Choose open arm embrace Imbibing divine grace Fear decry Laugh or cry |
Ok I see now.
I think! |
Bliss or kiss in the misty twist
Climb or fall, do we stall Relish the relish on my toast There is a place to float So settle in this boat Gently lay down your coat Feel the ocean ripples It’s a dream Bliss or kiss (I thought I’d do a practice run see if my runs are right? ) |
JustBe … Perfecto! :)
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Fear transcendence
Fear transcendence sets our soul free Heart lets go off desire Devoid of lust, hate and envy Love for love does aspire Vibrancy, by bliss buoyed No longer by life toyed Or by ego decoyed Divine parlance Fear transcendence |
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Goody! Our perfection takes diligence With focus and practice As co operation it serves Our limitless being We come into our own We are never alone Perfection dances one In unison Our perfection |
Now all that’s left is first quatrain end rhyme abab :)
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What??? What have I missed this time?? Lol |
Glisten
Glisten, begs our soul, it’s dark here Shed erst cravings savage Let thunderous bliss, each pore spear Drop ego spawned baggage In stillness and silence Spake voice of innocence Dwell in luminescence Listen Glisten |
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End rhyme in first quatrain … alternate rhyming sequence a-b-a-b |
Day and night
Day and night, God search our focus Fears and desires recede We waver not from love locus Our will to divine cede No secrets to ferret Judge not fault or merit Climbing to the summit Bliss delight Day and night |
Jesus Saves
Lord of the starfields heavens glory Gives way to our soul's story Jesus walked on dirty waters For the sake of our disorders He did withstand the current As the devil churned deep Within depts of our torrent Jesus saved The drowning |
@ Nowayout … beautiful! Not quite the format but who cares? Thanks for sharing!
Quietus form First stanza is a quatrain 8-6-8-6 syllable in end rhyme abab + Followed by 6-6-6 syllable tercet end rhyme ccc + Concluded by an equal syllable couplet using refrain from first line, as last line of the poem Refrain is also the poem title |
Silent thunder
Silent thunder vibrates within Each node of form aglow Magnetic rapture does heighten In tranquil stillness slow Let love pulsations rise Lower mind, vaporise Divine soul, realise Blissful wonder Silent thunder |
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I seriously believed I had it. Can you rewrite that last one I wrote so I can visually see again what I’ve missed. Graciously thankful.. |
JustBe poem in Quietus form re-written!
Our perfection Our perfection takes diligence With practice and focus Aligned with voice of our conscience Along the love locus We come into our own We are never alone Perfection has no clone In unison Our perfection |
Very nice and gracious thanks.
Here I go forward into the land of perfection once more!! I am floating in an unceasingly Untroubled land of dreams Fuelled by an unwavering joy A Limitless gleam Uncontained by the team Arises flowing streams Arranged and ordered schemes Delightfully I am floating So...it’s eight, six, eight, six (rhyme with the other six) Six, six rhyme, six rhyme Four Four (start of prose) |
@ JustBe … in the first stanza, first line last word must rhyme with last word of 3rd line. Likewise last word of second line must rhyme with last word of 4th line. Hence end rhyme pattern abab
The tercet can be different end word - ccc The last line you’ve got correct as the first line refrain (also poem title) but the preceding line of the couplet (last word) must rhyme with last word of the refrain, while having same syllable count as the refrain. In addition to all this the syllable count must be maintained. |
Feral instinct
Feral instinct, fear and control Seeking domination One-upmanship, the only goal From God, separation Stuporous mind in fog Tail now wagging the dog Think! Pause! Reboot, re-log From soul de-linked Feral instinct |
JustBe … now see above
First stanza is a quatrain of 4-lines The end rhymes alternate abab (free, envy and desire, aspire) The syllable counts are 8-6-8-6 The refrain, as also poem title from 1st line is Fear transcendence Next, a tercet (3-lines) of 6 syllables each with same end rhyme (buoyed, toyed, decoyed) Last the couplet .. 2 lines, equal syllable count (in this case 4) with rhyme (parlance, transcendence) |
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Seemed ok to me, Jesus is not about details anyway, rather all heart....:D |
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Sticking to the format with all heart Amazing how your brain Will twist it’s own domain and spark Yet it’s all good retrain An upside down Round and around Prose in woven gown Gets me through Sticking to... (If that makes sense and is in the perfecto stream I’m onto a winner me thinks!) |
JustBe … do a syllable check!
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Catch and release
Catch and release, each emotion As witness eternal Feel rapture, of bliss elation God bestowed miracle Here and now thus present Meld with the joy current Our innate element Flow on with ease Catch and release |
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True, my dear, true! As a matter of fact, I don’t bother about the rhyme … near rhymes do but on another site I’m on, poets check exact rhymes on rhymezone.com. Syllables are tricky, different sites offer different results sometimes. Poetrysoup syllable counter is fairly good, though not infallible. |
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Your like the most annoyingly persistent and kind grade six teacher who’s determined to get her pupils across the line for the next big step in life..lol Far out! Your onto it. I can’t believe I did it again! Ok..copy paste fix it this time! |
Sticking to the format with heart
Amazing how your brain Will twist it’s own domain and spark Yet it’s all good retrain An upside down Round and a round Prose will be found Gets me through Sticking to... |
Ah, alas, the tercet must have 6 syllables per line :)
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Maya veil
Maya veil that conceals our light Our souls limitation Presence yet discerns wrong from right Choosing love vibration Granted on earth, free will Each impulse we distil Till bliss does overspill Holy grail Maya veil |
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But then I thought he is safe! I’m now trying to call you out as to not own my errors..haha Seriously I’m going for it again..watch me! Stillness be all encompassing Sunset igniting pink My heart sinks into love pumping Joyous love, nature’s wink Darkened clouds cannot woe This moment all aglow Creation As she sows Can you see Stillness be |
@ JustBe … (thunderous applause)
I check syllable count on poetrysoup.com, so am unlikely to err |
Omg your such a legend dedicated to my cause.. haha
(You cheat, I rack my brain��) |
Spoilt for choice
Spoilt for choice, engulfed by desire We lose sense of balance Fleeting goals for which we aspire Corrupts our innocence The welcome mat is laid Bliss within is readymade If ego goodbye bade Lost our voice Spoilt for choice |
Goalposts shift
Goalposts shift, as we chase rainbows Bemused by our own mind Moment to moment, hunger grows Until with love aligned Trauma bonding with lust Choosing pathways unjust Love reservoir goes bust Soul adrift Goalposts shift |
We rise if we choose
We rise if we choose, by free will Becoming self-aware Next, each thought, mindfully distil Side stepping ego snare Time stretched stillness, quiet No ego spawned riot Cravings on a diet There is no excuse We rise if we choose |
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