In Your Eyes

In your eyes, I see hid/den glory ...8syls
In my eyes I see you..6syls
Laughing at the way we move around...8syls
Eye for an eye we dance...6syls


Lust and love es/caping..6syls
Let it go on the wind...6syls
Life is so big and small...6syls

I looked
In your eyes


syl·la·ble
/ˈsiləb(ə)l/
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noun
a unit of pronunciation having one vowel sound, with or without surrounding consonants, forming the whole or a part of a word; e.g., there are two syllables in water and three in inferno.
verb


Peace... always.

Jesus Saves

Lord of the star/fields heav/ens glory...8syl
Gives way to our soul's story...6syl
Jesus walked on dirty wat/ers 8syl
For the sake of dis/orders... 6 syl

He with/stood the cur/rents...6syl
As the de/vil churned deep...6syl
Within depts of tor/rents...6syl

Jesus saves
The drowning


Some small edits... Lol.

Corrections always welcomed.

Quietus poetry form

First stanza is a quatrain with 8-6-8-6 syllable count in end rhyme abab +
Followed by 6-6-6 syllable count tercet, end rhyme ccc +
Concluded by an equal syllable count rhyming couplet using refrain from first line, as the last line of the poem
The refrain is also the poem title

Syllable counts can be tricky. Use the poetrysoup.com syllable counter to check

Head melds with heart
 

Yes I’m coming in now to get picky with nowayout.. hehe

Your first stanza looks slightly off me thinks ..

‘In your eyes I see hidden glory’”- in my eyes I see 9 syl’s.

Poets at work
 

Our ugly side
 

Well then elaborate?

In your eyes I see hid/den Glo/ry???

Ok then... In eyes I see hidden Glory...

God help us to see!

:hug3:

What are fears
 

Love empowers