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Unseeking Seeker 22-08-2021 11:56 AM

Quietus
 
8-6-8-6 syllable count in rhyme abab +
6-6-6 syllable count tercet ccc +
equal syllable couplet using refrain from first line, as last line of the poem
Refrain is also the poem title

I call this format Quietus.

Look forward to contributions!

Unseeking Seeker 22-08-2021 11:57 AM

First things first
 

first things first, we quieten heart
melding our mind therein
all souls be one, none stand apart
as bliss throbs on our skin

all we do, is be still
shaped upon the anvil
surrendered to Gods will

quenching thirst
first things first

Unseeking Seeker 22-08-2021 11:57 AM

Galloping thought
 

Galloping thought, self-made prison
Fears and desires seduce
Inducing against soul treason
Free is joyous recluse

Wary of ego glue
Each moment we renew
Early morn pristine dew

Bliss mist not caught
Galloping thought

JustBe 22-08-2021 12:31 PM

My brain hurts to do this prose game
It’s like twisting a cork
Inside my brain in time with trains
Where nothing remain s

Weary is the strain
Tormenting my domain
I’ll get over it with pain!

(What’s next??)

Unseeking Seeker 22-08-2021 01:23 PM

@ JustBe … there’s a refrain too as end line, besides first quatrain following an abab end rhyme.

Let’s say, your poem title is ‘my brain hurts’ 3 syllables, as refrain from first line, the concluding lines could be -

thought forms spurt
my brain hurts

Unseeking Seeker 22-08-2021 01:25 PM

Laugh or cry
 

Laugh or cry, the sun will yet rise
Oh, why does heart contract
Does not each breath usher surprise
Soul eternal, a fact

Letís then cut to the chase
Choose open arm embrace
Imbibing divine grace

Fear decry
Laugh or cry

JustBe 22-08-2021 10:41 PM

Ok I see now.

I think!

JustBe 22-08-2021 10:48 PM

Bliss or kiss in the misty twist
Climb or fall, do we stall
Relish the relish on my toast
There is a place to float

So settle in this boat
Gently lay down your coat
Feel the ocean ripples

It’s a dream
Bliss or kiss

(I thought I’d do a practice run see if my runs are right? )

Unseeking Seeker 23-08-2021 02:14 AM

JustBe Ö Perfecto! :)

Unseeking Seeker 23-08-2021 02:15 AM

Fear transcendence
 

Fear transcendence sets our soul free
Heart lets go off desire
Devoid of lust, hate and envy
Love for love does aspire

Vibrancy, by bliss buoyed
No longer by life toyed
Or by ego decoyed

Divine parlance
Fear transcendence


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