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Old 14-04-2019, 08:15 AM
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Haiku

The Cherry Blossom
Habit of the Western Wind
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Old 14-04-2019, 07:01 PM
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Sun released ice spring sips
A snowy owls feather swims silently away
Robins return looking for worms
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Old 15-04-2019, 06:13 AM
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Old 15-04-2019, 04:47 PM
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Spring calling my name
Awaking me from long sleep
Make my winter dream

The Haiku rule of 5-7-5 syllables is not easy in English.
I don't know how easy it is in Japaneses.
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Old 16-04-2019, 06:12 PM
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Spring calling my name
Awaking me from long sleep
Make my winter dream

The Haiku rule of 5-7-5 syllables is not easy in English.
I don't know how easy it is in Japaneses.

It's challenging to write 'proper' Haiku in English that's for sure but that could be part of it's charm. You can get a little emotional, intellectual or spiritual work-out writing Haiku and there is always beauty in it's brevity like your beautiful Haiku above. Not sure what it's like writing Haiku in Japanese as i don't know the language unfortunately. Thank you for sharing
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Old 18-04-2019, 03:28 AM
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Sun released ice spring sips
A snowy owls feather swims silently away
Robins return looking for worms


I quote myself "revised" because this is figured is the spirit of Haiku.


Sun melting ice spring sips
A White snowy owl feather floats away
Crows returning cawing for home

Haiku is like describing your day in 3 words and capturing the spirit all the same.
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Old 18-04-2019, 03:52 AM
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Ok, here is another.

Spring welcomes me in
I fell into its embrace
Ready to blossom
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Old 18-04-2019, 04:01 AM
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I quote myself "revised" because this is figured is the spirit of Haiku.


Sun melting ice spring sips
A White snowy owl feather floats away
Crows returning cawing for home

Haiku is like describing your day in 3 words and capturing the spirit all the same.
Nice, now try to fit all that into 5, 7, 5 syllable rule.
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Old 18-04-2019, 09:30 PM
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Sprinkled with gold dust
Drawn from source to revive us
We set Spirit free.

Never tried a haiku before - did I get it right, 5 - 7 - 5? It's not words right, its 'vowel sounds'?
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Soaking in life, we spread the light <3
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Old 18-04-2019, 11:20 PM
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Looks OK to me Realm ki, it's not just the word count that matters, syllables.

Syl-la-ble counts three
Got it for this makes sev-en?
One two three four more....



Ta da ta da da
Da da ta da da da ta
Ta da da da ta.

Have-ing neu-ral mind
Tak-ing all the help I can
Show me the path home


But please not your vowels.
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